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Yes / No (circle one) Does each body paragraph have supporting details that explain or give clear examples for the reason? Yes / No (circle one) Does the write acknowledge a counterargument and respond to it? Yes / No (circle one) If yes, write down the counterargument and the response to it. What, if any, closing strategy does the writer use in the conclusion?____________________ Part II: Respond to your peers essay using Google Docs and the comment function. On your peers essay, leave a comment on one part of the essay where the writer does well. Make sure to be specific about what the writer does nicely and why. For example: Good job on your thesis statement! You included the suggestion and all 3 reasons for your evidence. -Maricor Chang 2/25/10 5:00 PM Then, leave a comment next to three specific places the writer could improve. Again, be specific and tell the writer how to improve this part. For example: You don't explain much about your issue in your background information. Explain why it's controversial and identify both sides of the argument. -Maricor Chang 2/25/10 5:03 PM The supporting details in this paragraph do not support the reason in the topic sentence. Give an example of how vending machines can provide breakfast for students. -Maricor Chang 2/25/10 5:07 PM I can see you attempted to use a pointed question in your conclusion, but youre not directing the reader in one direction with the question. Reword the question so the reader wants to give the answer you want. Instead of writing, Would you have an abortion? write something like, After all the other options available, why would anyone still willingly take an innocent life through abortion? -Maricor Chang 2/25/10 5:10 PM Use the following list of questions as a guide to possible items to comment on. Use your notes to see what the writer did well and what the writer should improve on. Introduction Does the writer have all A, B, and C parts in the introduction? If not, what is missing? Does the writer use an effective attention grabber? How could the writer develop it more interesting? Does the reader give enough information about the background information? If not, what else could be shared? Does the writer give a clear thesis that includes a suggestion + 3 reasons for evidence? If not, what is missing? Counterargument Does the writer examine a counterargument? Is the argument actually against the thesis? If not, what could be a possible counterargument? If the writer does have a counterargument, does the writer actually respond to the counterargument, or does the writer just give another supporting reason for the thesis? What could the writer say to improve the response to counterargument? Does the writer provide enough supporting details, examples, or evidence in the counterargument paragraph to show that the counterargument is weak, and therefore, reinforce the thesis? Ideas and Sequence Does the order of the body paragraphs make sense? How could the writer rearrange the paragraphs so they are in a more logical order? Does the writer stayed focused on the thesis in the paper? If not, where can the writer delete extraneous information or explain how something relates to the thesis? Does each body paragraph have a separate reason that supports the thesis? If not, which ones are the same? What are other reasons that could be used in a new body paragraph? Does each body paragraph have supporting details that explain or give clear examples for the reason? If not, what are some examples or supporting details the writer could add? Transitions Does the writer use complex transitions between paragraphs? If there are basic transitions, what are examples of transitional phrases or sentences that could be used instead? Does the writer use transitions within each body paragraph to connect the examples/supporting details to the reason? If not, what transitions can the writer use to do so? Are any transitions used incorrectly? If so, what would be a better transition to use? Conclusion Does the conclusion use an effective closing strategy? How could the writer change the conclusion to persuade the reader? Does the conclusion have more than just a strategy used? 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